At long last… I finished my Sonnet homework last week and can now share it with you all. Hope you enjoy it, it took me 3 hours but, I am content with the outcome.
I must not grieve thee nor shed a lone tear
I must proceed as if I do not care
For weeping makes losing you worse my dear
Agonizing memories I cannot bear
Every dewy teardrop that escapes me
Burns my flesh like the fiery depths of hell
I must not succumb to sorrow of thee
For I shall be reminded of our farewell
But, weeping cleanses the grief-stricken soul
Easing each previous moment of pain
Allowing the broken to become whole
Sanctioning lovely memories again
Dire sorrow causes me not to cry
But, sans tears for your loss I’d surely die
I love you my sweet Daughter… I miss your Sister very much also sweetheart. This brought tears to my eyes…
Mom, it has been an unexpected shock and pleasure to see you comment. I know you miss her a lot as well and her memory will never be forgotten as long as their is air in my lungs and ink in my soul. I love you mom.
This is the second sonnet I’ve read so far by a blogger… and it gets better every time. Strength and vulnerability… there’s so much heart poured here…
Well done Jenni. Very moving.
Thank you Born. I know you can appreciate the accomplishment as having written your own sonnet. I wonder if Shakespeare struggled as much as we did… 😀
Absolutley Beautiful. You are a very soulfull writer…it sounds like this comes from Experience..I can truly feel the essence of gief, longing and love in this Sonnet. You should be very proud of your work. Very moving and heartfelt…it brings tears to those of us who have lost someone dear…there is a recogntion within you words…
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Thank you Ravenmyth. Yes, experience… it is called Jessica’s because my sister who just passed in Feb was named that. I figured if I was going to write one of the hardest things I’ve ever had to write the least I could do was bless my sister’s memory with a sonnet. I am glad we got a chance to connect, thank you for visiting.
well do i must say Shakespeare would envy thee. god bless
Thank you Roy, maybe I channeled Shakespeare or something.
So pretty! I read it twice and both times pulled out something new and lovely and sad and real. Thank you for sharing!
Thank you Maureen for you first visit to my blog. I worked very hard on this until I was positive that what I wanted to reflect came through. I am elated that you enjoyed it and hope to see more comments from you in the future.
Exquisitely beautiful. It is not easy to write a sonnet but you have done a great job. Loved it
http://rimlybezbaruah.blogspot.com/2011/06/story-of-manypart-ii.html
Thank you Rimly. You really think I did a great job? I am so happy you liked it.
Oh so beautifully written! Straight from the heart to the heart.
Thank you Mari. Heart to heart is always a good thing. 😀
Touching…..
Thank you for your first visit to my blog Janaki. I am glad you enjoyed it and I hope to see more comments from you in the future.
very sad to read although very well stated.
Losing loved ones is always sad. I have found writing about it helps me a lot.
As an exercise in dealing with grief, this must have had therapeutic value for you Jenni. Sonnets are hard to write, so I commend you for tackling the challenge. Since I haven’t read many contemporary sonnets I shared this with a writer friend who is former president of the NC Poetry Society. And here is what she said.
“I understand the theme of not crying, but ultimately, needing to cry. The language seems stilted with the “thee.” The French “sans” in the last line seems incongruent with the other language. If you read contemporary sonnets, they use today’s language and the lines wrap around so that the rhyme scheme has no end line jolt.”
Thank you Debra for sharing my sonnet and for the helpful feedback from your friend. Sometimes we forget about staying within one language when writing because the USA is such a melting pot of different cultures and slang. It never dawned on me while writing this that I was using other languages except “thee”. I actually do use “sans” a lot in my normal conversations. I will keep this in mind when I attempt to write another one. Thank you.
Really enjoyed this .. You wrote about breaking up and that deep pain something most of us can remember from at least one time in our life!!!
http://jpweddingphotograpy.blogspot.com/2011/06/sacred-ibis-and-american-white-ibis.html
Thank you for reading and commenting Jim. I suppose this could come off as a breakup as well as what I intended. Deep pain is something I am all too familiar with and can write about to no ends. But, even though I hurt it is very therapeutic for me to release it in my writing.
wow, life takes a twist but somehow we will make it and move on.
Oh wow. This is so beautiful. I don’t normally like Shakespearean language so much. It honors your sister with beauty. I’m so sorry for your loss.
Thank you Rhyme. I love the language in movies, i.e Romeo and Juliet but, to do it was hard. I only did it for homework otherwise it wouldn’t have even been done. Thank you so much.
Who knew what was lurking in the back room when we thought the sweet children were asleep. Just the newest writer and poet hiding under the covers whispering another story to her little charge. The momma child raising herself and taking care of the younger one in a crazy house of rednecks and unhappy drunks. Such talent being hidden until now. How it has exploded these last few years. Just never let it be hidden again. Love you sweetheart and do keep up the good work. Grandma
Thank you Grandma. I wouldn’t dream of not writing. Not only do I love doing it I love making a difference in someone’s life if only for a minute while they are reading what I wrote. Love you too.
What a beautiful tribute Jen. I know I’m late on this, but I was very touched by the emotions you spilled in this sonnet. I pray the pain becomes less and less each day for you and your mom. Blessings and peace to you both.